Re: Heroes Uprising: The Story discussion.

by Chulance Thu Oct 01, 2009 8:35 am

Yeah and we might get people for the rp come on....

by Chulance Thu Oct 08, 2009 8:47 am

Justin needs to post more chapters....

by justinlynch3 Thu Oct 08, 2009 10:14 am

I'll get to it.

by Chulance Thu Oct 08, 2009 12:40 pm

GO GO GOGO!

by Chulance Tue Nov 10, 2009 7:06 am

GRR!

It's been a month almost hurry!

by justinlynch3 Tue Nov 10, 2009 8:39 am

Yeah it has been a while hasn't it.

by Chulance Tue Nov 10, 2009 8:48 am

Yeah it's really easy to right considering your just copying and re-writing lol.

You haven't even gotten out of the first topic and you have 12 chapters.

Heck you haven't got past the first 10 pages right?

by Chulance Sun Dec 06, 2009 8:05 am

COME ON!

by justinlynch3 Sun Dec 06, 2009 9:48 am

Maybe I'll get back to this soon.

by Chulance Sun Dec 06, 2009 9:49 am

DO IT NOAW!

It's the easiest fic, your turning chapters into stories.

by justinlynch3 Sun Dec 06, 2009 9:56 am

I know it's easy.

I may try to get the Izoru fight finished on MO, then I might take another break and come back to this for a while.

by Chulance Sun Dec 06, 2009 9:58 am

GOOD!

Izoru fight lol, how long must it take? HURRY IT UP!

by justinlynch3 Sun Dec 06, 2009 10:08 am

I don't rush my stories Chu, if you do, you'll end up with crap.

by Chulance Tue Jan 05, 2010 2:11 pm

Yeah, okay.

Well you said this last year, I've taken up the story. You can help out, and lol1991. If your not lazy Very Happy

I'm Already on Chapter 17, you did 12 chapters. I'm finishing this, just edit the chapters grammar and punctuation please!

Chapter 17 is up.

by justinlynch3 Tue Jan 05, 2010 2:36 pm

Last year, I guess technically yeah. Yeah I don't mind if you pick up the story, it seems to be going good so far.

by justinlynch3 Tue Jan 05, 2010 7:44 pm

Recent chapter was good.

Little nitpicking on my part, but a motorcycle doesn't have a gas or brake pedal. It has a throttle and brake handle.

by Chulance Tue Jan 05, 2010 7:48 pm

Thanks, took me a while to make and organize Bank Battle.

Well whatever, you can edit in throttle and brake handle, cuz I'm not!

Also don't update this on Sly or Mystic. I wanna keep them behind, so I can post a chapter there everyday.

by justinlynch3 Tue Jan 05, 2010 7:58 pm

Done.

by justinlynch3 Thu Jan 07, 2010 3:05 pm

William: A word of advice, you aren't as good as you think you are.
Troy: Oh you think I'm not huh.
Isabel: Conceded idiot. Can I fight him next?
Holst: No.

Check it out Chu, I rearranged a line here, putting Troy's comment after Williams, instead of at the end where it was. It fits better here.

You remember where I said that turning the rp to a story, I'd be rearranging some stuff, well at this point the rp is starting to pick up, this is where you want to be watching for stuff like this. Rearranging some lines so they sound better, or make more sense.

And if you start seeing lines that was mistakes in the rp, well of course, you would remove or edit them, though I doubt you'll find that this early in the rp.

I also made a few minor edits in some of Troy's comments, I never changed anything he said, just made it so he keeps the attitude up, that's all.

Fyi, nice job on the chapter though.

by Chulance Thu Jan 07, 2010 3:59 pm

Thanks for the edit man.

Yeah like I want some help really. Me, you and Lol should be writing this more as a team. We need to first put the chapters into a format, name them, edit mistakes from the rp/add line's. Then post it.

So why not edit the chapters, either through pm, or on your "Storage" place.

Also thanks Very Happy

by justinlynch3 Thu Jan 07, 2010 4:19 pm

No problem.

The good thing about posting here is that me and lol can go through the chapters, change something if it's out of place, then inform you about it.

by Chulance Thu Jan 07, 2010 4:45 pm

Okay..

Also you should write the chapters with a lot of action? Can you do that? Like the fights between Milo and Zulan, since I'm not really good writing fighting scene's.

Thanks, I better get to the next chapter Revelations...! DUN DUN DUN DO!

by justinlynch3 Thu Jan 07, 2010 5:25 pm

Alright, will do.

Anyway, this chapter is good I believe, no reason to add to this fight.

by justinlynch3 Mon Jan 11, 2010 6:27 pm

Alright, done with the two new chapters of HU.

No line changes, just did some work with the grammar and spelling (adding missing periods for the most past, though I had to cap a few words to.)

by Chulance Mon Jan 11, 2010 6:52 pm

^^ Thanks Justin.

I'll go read, the two new chaps Revelations & Flames Uprising will look good! Thanks Justin! Your a big help, don't be afraid to add some lines or something. I'm gonna work on the next chapter tomorrow. I'll try to do two new chapters a day, or one.

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